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PostSubject: Yet you offer me love   Yet you offer me love EmptySat Oct 08, 2011 1:50 pm

I've ran from you and I stood alone
I've defiled flesh, I've broken bone
I killed myself when I cast that stone
I didn't care about my life...so you offered your own

I've left your side for a sinful place
I know I've caused tears to stream down your face
I created dark memories that are hard to erase
I've done these things against you...yet you offer me grace

I've fallen prey to much temptation
Infatuation, lustful fascination
Self-dedication, self-adulation
I've done these things against you...yet you offer salvation

I've hung myself from that powdered rope
and I've drowned myself in that liquid dope
I've lived in the cross-hairs of the demon's scope
I've done these things against you...yet you offer me hope

I did a man dirty over an inadvertent shove
I scarred the mind and the body of a precious little dove
I think I've hurt everybody that I can think of
I've done these things against you...yet you offer me love

The burden of this world was too great for me
and it offered up nothing but hate for me
I used to always think it was too late for me
but out of the mercy of your heart...you wait for me
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PostSubject: Re: Yet you offer me love   Yet you offer me love EmptySat Oct 08, 2011 2:00 pm

"I've ran from you and I stood alone
I've defiled flesh, I've broken bone
I killed myself when I cast that stone
I didn't care about my life...so you offered your own

I've left your side for a sinful place
I know I've caused tears to stream down your face
I created dark memories that are hard to erase
I've done these things against you...yet you offer me grace

I've fallen prey to much temptation
Infatuation, lustful fascination
Self-dedication, self-adulation
I've done these things against you...yet you offer salvation

I've hung myself from that powdered rope
and I've drowned myself in that liquid dope
I've lived in the cross-hairs of the demon's scope
I've done these things against you...yet you offer me hope

I did a man dirty over an inadvertent shove
I scarred the mind and the body of a precious little dove
I think I've hurt everybody that I can think of
I've done these things against you...yet you offer me love

The burden of this world was too great for me
and it offered up nothing but hate for me
I used to always think it was too late for me
but out of the mercy of your heart...you wait for me"
My favorite lines were all of it!
Seems like we've been down similar roads, I'll help your walk if you'll help mine bro' !
God Bless,
He loves us more that we can ever know, no matter what !
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PostSubject: Re: Yet you offer me love   Yet you offer me love EmptySat Oct 08, 2011 2:23 pm

I agree with oneagleswings. I couldn't pick just a few favorite lines. You structured your work nicely too. Great work!
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PostSubject: Re: Yet you offer me love   Yet you offer me love EmptySat Oct 08, 2011 2:49 pm

I'm reading all three of them again. Didn't want to miss anything!
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PostSubject: Re: Yet you offer me love   Yet you offer me love EmptySun Oct 09, 2011 12:27 am

Wow. I'm streaming tears. That was truly lovely. So much hope thru pain. My favorite part of the serenity prayer is " excepting hardship as a pathway to peace", you nailed it. Our God is an awesome God!!!!!!!!
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