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PostSubject: The abbattoir   The abbattoir EmptyTue Aug 16, 2011 12:42 pm



The abattoir,

Babylon`s twentieth-century asylum.

The whore's touch their faces in manmade mirrors.

Murmuring in angst, their tongues repeat diatribes towards its own reflection.

"I just don't like my face today"

All eyes catatonic.

Justifiable antidote is generously provided.

Trance inducing prescriptions feed the populace.

Thus, the birth of the inanimate existence.


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PostSubject: Re: The abbattoir   The abbattoir EmptyTue Aug 16, 2011 3:00 pm

I love it. Hope to see the rest of it...? You have an excellent grasp of the English language, for sure. I've had to bust out my dictionary more times just between your poems than I have in a month. I appreciate you. Word.
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PostSubject: Re: The abbattoir   The abbattoir EmptyTue Dec 04, 2012 4:37 pm

I have finished it. Two years later.
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PostSubject: Re: The abbattoir   The abbattoir EmptyFri Dec 28, 2012 2:44 pm

As always, a very thought provoking, well written piece.
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PostSubject: Re: The abbattoir   The abbattoir EmptySat Dec 29, 2012 12:42 pm

I find controversy incites deeper thought, desired reaction:) love the piece!
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