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PostSubject: Mental suicide   Mental suicide EmptyTue Oct 25, 2011 1:42 pm

Once upon a time, once upon a rhyme
in a land so close yet very far away
there lived a young man, who came up with a plan
to catch tomorrow without living in today

He felt right from the start, and felt it in his heart
that where he was today was just no good
so he promised in a letter, that tomorrow would be better
and he jumped from the rooftop where he stood

As he started falling, he heard a soft voice calling
asking why he was so full of sorrow
The young man could only say, that he hated yesterday
so today he was jumping towards tomorrow

The soothing gentle voice, offered him a choice
and stopped the man mid-way through his fall
But to the voice's dismay, the young man simply turned away
and refused to listen to the call

Though he eventually hit the ground, every day he walked around
wondering why his body hadn't died
and as tears rolled down his eyes, he would finally realize
physical death beats mental-suicide

The voice would only say, "Just be grateful for today
for the time you live is mine for you to borrow
and should you change your mind, I'm not very hard to find;
I am yesterday, today, and tomorrow"
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PostSubject: Re: Mental suicide   Mental suicide EmptyThu Oct 27, 2011 5:04 pm

The voice would only say, "Just be grateful for today
for the time you live is mine for you to borrow
and should you change your mind, I'm not very hard to find;
I am yesterday, today, and tomorrow"

Awesome, that was moving. Love the heart you put into this one.
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PostSubject: Re: Mental suicide   Mental suicide EmptyFri Oct 28, 2011 2:45 am

Powerful. I love the line "I am yesterday, today and tomorrow". I could feel the emotion. Great work.
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