Me and The Devil

ME AND THE DEVIL
By Jan Phillips

The Devil he’s a goner and he knows that he can’t win
But he just keeps a knockin wanting me to let him in.
Jesus is my Savior and he helps me guard the door
He won't let ole satan set foot upon the floor.
Sometimes I've beem tempted just to see if he could do
Any of the things he promises to you.
But then I still won't let him in
Because I refuse to live within his sin.
I don’t want to burn in hell for all eternity
I want my Jesus to be where my eyes may see.
Satan, he tries to tempt me in various different ways
But it hardly ever works cause I still give God the praise.
My soul belongs to God you see as does my heart and mind
But he lets me backslide and sin sometimes I find.
That’s when the devil is always there like a hungry wolf at the door
But if he is so hungry he can go buy food from the store.
Satan wants to tempt me with things of the earth
But the cost of my soul is not what things are worth.
God now has my soul in his hands you see
Because He gave up his very life for me.

Hello cleo574,
I like the "Christian Soldier" feel of the poem. Temptation is something we all struggle with. My favorite lines are the first line, and the line that says "But if he is so hungry he can go buy food at the store." That one made me laugh. To spruce it up I suggest trying to use contractions in lines that end up a little too long, like: "Sometimes I've been tempted just to see if he could do". It will help keep the beat you've established. I also noticed a couple of typos you might like to know about: In the Fourth line want should be won't and the same thing in line Seven, want should be won't. God Bless

Hi cleo574 :)

GREAT POEM! I agree with the ADMIN that I like the "Christian Soldier" feel to it!

Count me in! Love the feel of this poem. Very nice.

That's right you tell that ole satan if he's hungry he can go and get some food from the store,we ain't got nuthin' for you here. Go get you some ramen noodles or lil' debbie's snack cakes c'mon !
You tell im'.
Liked it :)