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cm3pak
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PostSubject: The Journey    The Journey  EmptyWed Aug 24, 2011 9:41 pm

I’m lost on the dark and narrow road
so many choices I don’t know where to go
So I fall on my knees and I cry out to you
Help me, show me the way to go
You told me these words never to forget

Just keep running into the light
Don’t be scared just trust I’m their
And ill wrap my arms around you

So many years have passed me by
And im lost on the dark and narrow road
So I fall on my knees and I cry out to you
Help me, show me the way to go
And I remember these words you told me never to forget.

Just keep running into the light
Don’t be scared just trust im their
And ill wrap my arms
Wrap my arms around you
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Lora
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PostSubject: Re: The Journey    The Journey  EmptyWed Aug 24, 2011 10:43 pm

Hello cm3pak,
Welcome to Christian Creative Writers. I like how as the individual grows you repeat the lines:

"Just keep running into the light
Don’t be scared just trust I'm there
And I'll wrap my arms"

It's like the individual has to be reminded of the same simple lessons that got him through the first time. It's like that for all of us, I think. Great work! I look forward to reading more in the future.
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cm3pak
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PostSubject: Re: The Journey    The Journey  EmptySun Sep 11, 2011 4:52 pm

Thanks for the Feedback!
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oneagleswings
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PostSubject: Re: The Journey    The Journey  EmptySun Sep 11, 2011 6:07 pm

Running to, is so much better than running from, isn't it?
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cm3pak
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PostSubject: Re: The Journey    The Journey  EmptySun Sep 11, 2011 6:12 pm

oneagleswings wrote:
Running to, is so much better than running from, isn't it?

Amen to that, now i wrote this 16 years ago and still have yet to prefect this method....ohy!!! :)
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