Versical PENCIL PUSHER (26-50 posts)
Posts : 50 Join date : 2011-10-11 Location : Wiltshire, England.
| Subject: MUSHROOMS Thu Dec 15, 2011 6:43 am | |
| What's the outcome of this day Did it really make it's mark Upon a world so closed to Him That they prefer life in the dark Like mushrooms thriving in the gloom They're fed a load of tasty dung Which stops them looking for the light That shines from what The Saviours done.
We're the carriers of this light Through us He's supposed to shine Easter's so familiar The message sadly fades with time Let us take His sacrifice To live the victory that He's won Pick those mushrooms from their grave And bathe them in the glorious Son.
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oneagleswings ADMIN II
CCW GOLD MEMBER CCW SUPPORTER 2X POETRY CONTEST WINNER Posts : 4323 Age : 64 Join date : 2011-08-30 Location : south carolina
| Subject: Re: MUSHROOMS Thu Dec 15, 2011 7:04 am | |
| This puts me to shame and bows my head, a similar message to mine, but much better said. In less words at that, I stand corrected, my work will stand, as a contrast... a message, much needed, redirected.
thanks for sharing, GOD BLESS!! |
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oneagleswings ADMIN II
CCW GOLD MEMBER CCW SUPPORTER 2X POETRY CONTEST WINNER Posts : 4323 Age : 64 Join date : 2011-08-30 Location : south carolina
| Subject: Re: MUSHROOMS Thu Dec 15, 2011 7:21 am | |
| Read this quite a few times...really love this metaphor and message. It is your best yet in my humble opinion but I sincerely feel, it is only the beginning.
Much Love Brother, Peace be with you.
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Lora SITE ADMINISTRATOR
Posts : 5907 Age : 53 Join date : 2011-07-26 Location : Southern CA
| Subject: Re: MUSHROOMS Thu Dec 15, 2011 2:03 pm | |
| - oneagleswings wrote:
- This puts me to shame and bows my head,
a similar message to mine, but much better said. In less words at that, I stand corrected, my work will stand, as a contrast... a message, much needed, redirected.
thanks for sharing, GOD BLESS!! I wholeheartedly disagree! Both works are in completely different styles. Although there is a similar subject discussed, there is little else that can be compared. They are both excellent works within their own individual style. |
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