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PostSubject: One more day   One more day EmptySat Dec 17, 2011 3:17 pm

Now I lay me down to sleep

I pray the Lord my soul to keep

If I should die before I wake...

dear God, please send me back, for my children's sake



I promised my babies I wouldn't leave, I wouldn't die

until they spread their own wings and were ready to fly

When you put them in my life, when you blessed me with their love

you gave me all I need on earth, everything I dreamed of

You trusted in me, Lord, that I would always do my best

and now your humble servant asks one final request

and that's to please give me more, just a little more time

Don't let this be my last hug, don't let this be my last rhyme

I have to teach 'em life-lessons that they'll never forget

and dear God, they're not ready, so please don't take me yet

One's a new mom and I'm sure she'll need my advice

and one can kind of tie his shoes but he ties the same one twice

One is serving in Iraq and I can't wait to have her back

My oldest boy's spray-painting trains at the railroad track

One needs a lot of work on saying "please" and "thank you"

and the last one doesn't get the importance of shampoo

They're all so beautiful and special like you meant for them to be

and when I close my eyes at night they are all that I see

I thank you, dear Christ, for letting me be their dad

and I know I don't want to go because I don't want 'em to be sad

Forgive me Lord, for being selfish, I'll never put you to the test

I only pray for one more day before I take my final rest
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PostSubject: Re: One more day   One more day EmptySat Dec 17, 2011 3:35 pm

Wow, that was beautiful. I felt the heart in that one.
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PostSubject: Re: One more day   One more day EmptySat Dec 17, 2011 5:58 pm

"Now I lay me down to sleep

I pray the Lord my soul to keep

If I should die before I wake...

dear God, please send me back, for my children's sake"

as i was reading this, didn't see the twist coming in very common everyday prayer coming...wow!
sets the rest up beautifully.


"and one can kind of tie his shoes but he ties the same one twice"
...great heart in this!!




God Bless

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