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rhymarhyma
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PostSubject: My first post!   My first post! EmptyThu Aug 11, 2011 2:09 pm

He shines the sun for you, my lass
to prove to you the dark will pass
Hoping soon that you will see
He is the truth, He'll set you free

He sheds a tear for you, my sweet
curled up in your retreat
Hoping soon you realize
one who believes never dies

He offers words to you, my son
on the edge, on the run
Hoping soon that you will hear
He's never left, He's always near

He promises a new dawn, my girl
eyes of green and skin of pearl
Hoping that the times you stray
are gone away like yesterday

He gave His life for you, my child
living reckless, living wild
Hoping soon you'll change your ways
He'll love you forever, the rest of your days

He shapes a path for you, my lost
to save your life at any cost
Hoping soon you switch your track
See the light, don't fade to black

He reaches out to you, my daughter
almost sinking, treading water
Hoping soon you do not drown
He'll lift you up, not let you down

He makes it rain for you, my lad
to wash away the pains you've had
Hoping soon that you will know
never will He let you go

He gives a voice to you, my dear
for seven words He longs to hear
Hoping soon that you will say
"I give my life to Christ today"
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PostSubject: Re: My first post!   My first post! EmptyThu Aug 11, 2011 2:27 pm

Nice Quatrain! It has an awesome message, nice flow, and very rythmic beat. Great work, rhymarhyma!
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PostSubject: Nery nice   My first post! EmptyThu Aug 11, 2011 2:30 pm

I totally enjoyed what I just read
Thank you so much for sharing your creative wisdom.
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rhymarhyma
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PostSubject: Re: My first post!   My first post! EmptyThu Aug 11, 2011 2:33 pm

Right on! I had to look up the word "quatrain." I learn something new every day, for sure. And thank you, Chapter2. Totally diggin' on your username.
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