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chele
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PostSubject: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyTue Oct 11, 2011 3:14 am

From the Roman Soldier

A crown of thorns
We placed on your head
Blood coming forth
From the wounds as you bled

Beaten and scourged
From your head to your feet
You can hardly stand
You are growing so weak

“Take up Your cross to
The top of that hill,”
The crowd that has gathered
Becomes quiet and still

You say not a word
As You lift its weight
And carry Your cross
To the place of Your fate

I should try to stop this
I think to myself
But instead I put that
Thought on a shelf

“Bring me the nails”
I hear someone say
“And hold him down
It is time that he pays”

A clink of the hammer
As it drives in the nails
He cries out in pain
Oh how He did wail

“Now raise up the cross”
Comes the command
And as I pick it up
I touch His hand

His head turns my way
He looks into my eyes
“Forgive me" I say
And I start to cry

The people they mock Him
Without any fear
So many insults
For Him to hear

“Son of God! Come down,
IF that is true”
He cries “forgive them
They know not what they do”

Then He looks up to Heaven
With love in His eyes
“It is finished,” He whispers
And the Son of Man dies

I look up at Him
And giving a nod
I say “this Man
Was the true Son of God."


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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyTue Oct 11, 2011 4:49 am

WOW!!!!!! I had to cry. It is so lovely, so sobering, so sad, so praiseworthy. We could never love like Jesus, but then again we could never save like Him. Thank you so much!!!!!
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyTue Oct 11, 2011 10:49 am

I got a little misty too. That is some spectacular work. It is a moving a powerful piece. My tears started right about the time I read this:

His head turns my way
He looks into my eyes
“Forgive me I say”
And I start to cry
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyTue Oct 11, 2011 12:59 pm

Wow, a truly moving piece. I loved it.
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyTue Oct 11, 2011 6:19 pm

Thanks so much everyone. It means a lot to me that you liked it. I always get nervous when I put up a post. Y'all make me glad that I did. :)
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyTue Oct 11, 2011 7:46 pm

Now that was one powerful piece of work. I could see it all happening. I felt the Roman Soldiers pain. Wish I could write like that.
God bless
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyTue Oct 11, 2011 10:28 pm

cleo574 wrote:
Now that was one powerful piece of work. I could see it all happening. I felt the Roman Soldiers pain. Wish I could write like that.
God bless
Jan P

I think you do write like that!
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyWed Oct 12, 2011 12:23 am

Thank you Miss Jan! That means so much to me. And I TOTALLY agree with Lora. I enjoy your work very much. Your poetry is full of emotion and you painted such a vivid picture in "Rotten Potatoes" I could almost smell those rotten potatoes lol.
You are a blessing!
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyWed Oct 12, 2011 1:57 am

Must be something in the water in SC!
From the perspective of the roman soldier what a unique concept, very moving and effective!
Like they say in sc..."I know you right!."
God Bless.
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyWed Oct 12, 2011 11:29 am

Wow! I thought to myself when I read this work of art. Your POEM has really put the icing on the cake of the piece I wrote about his pain. You are remarkable when it comes to the depth of writing. I love my writings, but this one has certainly got my heart twirling around in silence. Could you please read my poem "Pure Love in His Will" and give your opinion on a critique level. Amazing work!
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyThu Feb 23, 2012 1:38 am

this belongs near a "garden" Jesus Cross
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyThu Feb 23, 2012 2:04 am

Awe thanks eagle! You rock! band
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyThu Feb 23, 2012 2:09 am

ur' welcome...off to work i go, straight up 26 to columbia the down 378 to egdefield and i'm runnin' late!
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyThu Feb 23, 2012 2:12 am

Be safe!
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyThu Feb 23, 2012 12:49 pm

Thank you so much for sharing this with us. I think the whole site is probably in tears after reading it.

Quote :
Now raise up the cross”
Comes the command
And as I pick it up
I touch His hand


Reminds me of so many scriptures where touching Jesus or the hem of His garment etc., are healing.
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyFri Feb 24, 2012 2:34 am

Thank you, Miss Thena. Your opinion matters very much to me. I think of it as the golden stamp of approval. I am such a fan of you work.
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PostSubject: Re: From the Roman Soldier   From the Roman Soldier EmptyFri Feb 24, 2012 11:39 am

That is so sweet of you chele. We all love your work. You are so very talented!
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