Be gone, blackbird

Subject: Be gone, blackbird Thu Aug 11, 2011 4:55 pm

Oh blackbird, blackbird of death
I've heard your call and I've felt your breath
You stalked me for so very long
squawking out the Reaper's song
With talons wrapped around your prize
pecking at my weary eyes
pushing me out on that ledge
closer, closer to the edge
but just before I took that leap
before I took my final sleep
I cried out loud, and my cry was heard
Salvation came...be gone, blackbird

Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Thu Aug 11, 2011 5:29 pm

This is nearly a sonnet. English sonnets are lyric poems that are 14 lines long falling into three quatrains (poems that are four rhyming lines) and a concluding couplet (two rhyming lines). Italian (or Petrarchan) sonnets are divided into two quatrains and a six-line sestet.

Yet again, great poem!

Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Thu Aug 11, 2011 9:38 pm

You are absolutely educating me! Tomorrow I'm gonna try and actually follow a style. Right now, I just kinda write what I feel. Right on!

Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Fri Aug 12, 2011 1:42 pm

I can definitely see the sonnet in this. The last line is perfect. "Be gone blackbird!" I love poetry for it's metaphors. You can see this in some of my writing and well. Keep it coming!

Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Sat Aug 13, 2011 8:49 pm

Where are your writings, cindergirl6? I wanna read.

Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Mon Aug 15, 2011 6:07 am

http://contributor.yahoo.com/user/1164427/aimee_weed.html

https://en.wordpress.com/signup/

http://www.authonomy.com/writing-community/profile/me/

Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Mon Aug 15, 2011 7:42 pm

The only one I could access was the yahoo. I like your style, cindergirl6. Word.