Jak Hardy
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 |  Subject: A Solitary Olive Tree Mon Jan 21, 2013 7:12 pm | |
| There was a solitary olive tree
In a field standing,
Caught about by mighty winds,
It’s leaves and branches dancing.
Ever-green and Evanescent,
Endless in its motion,
Despite the desolation all around,
The wind-struck land erosion.
A foxtrot fueled by furious breeze,
Love-struck and dazed the olive tree lay,
That the wind who knows no distant end,
Nor rest would lead it in divine ballet.
In the carnal dust around the tree
Consumed by communion,
A cordial truth; the wind’s presence,
A redeeming conclusion. |
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Lora
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| | Subject: Re: A Solitary Olive Tree Thu Jan 31, 2013 12:18 am | |
| Love the alliteration, assonance, and consonance along with a stirring message. It rolls off the tongue very nicely. Excellent! |
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rhymarhyma
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Join date : 2011-08-11
Location : Denver, CO
| | Subject: Re: A Solitary Olive Tree Thu Jan 31, 2013 9:29 am | |
| Amazingly beautiful poem. No doubt. |
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Thena
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| | Subject: Re: A Solitary Olive Tree Thu Jan 31, 2013 10:16 am | |
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