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Three years in Waiting Empty
PostSubject: Three years in Waiting   Three years in Waiting EmptyWed Feb 13, 2013 7:02 am

Three Years in Waiting
(a donor’s heart)

He finally spoke, “I want to build.”
Our visit was just about over
He didn’t actually smile
But his eyes lifted
Towards mine
Not to offer
But to acknowledge
He may share an
Oxygen molecule
Or two

I then gathered my things
Like any good carpenter
Would do

The aroma of
My thoughts would stay though-
spattered chips of curiosity
and curled shavings of wavering thoughts
scattered on the floor
next to his hospital bed
like a mess of saw dust often
found in
my shop

The nurse ratcheted the curtain
I squeezed toward the door
The suction machine
Coaxed his saliva
His new heart still
And slowly pumping
Swimming softly
In the pool of
Fluid he’s
Coaxed to pee
Away with the aid
Of Aldactone

“Ill stop by
And see you
Next week,”
I said and walked
Down the hall
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PostSubject: Re: Three years in Waiting   Three years in Waiting EmptyWed Feb 13, 2013 10:55 am


One to read over and over
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PostSubject: Re: Three years in Waiting   Three years in Waiting EmptyWed Mar 20, 2013 11:53 pm

There is nothing antiseptic about your work, that's for sure. Your work, I love to roll around the tongue and savor for a little while. Beautiful piece.
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PostSubject: Re: Three years in Waiting   Three years in Waiting EmptyThu Mar 21, 2013 3:22 am

Hey Laura, thank you. This poem was written one afternoon after visiting a young guy I had followed at the hospital for a few years. He had a bad heart, often keeping him distant and far from his home. He had recently got so sick he had to have a transplant. When I walked into his room I expected a smile but only got a look, questioning, “Why do I still feel so bad?” He did crack a slight smile when I said goodbye. When I got home I wrote this poem.
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