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rhymarhyma
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PostSubject: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptyFri Aug 12, 2011 2:32 pm

One heart, one mind, one body, one soul

I let God unlock my mind that was out of control

One body, one soul, one heart, one mind

I let God unlock my heart so I could love the love I find

One mind, one body, one soul, one heart

I let God unlock my body that was falling apart

One soul, one heart, one mind, one body

I let God unlock my soul so I could be somebody

Four pieces of a puzzle, that when put together, set me free

A simple, complex puzzle...the puzzle that is me
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PostSubject: Re: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptyFri Aug 12, 2011 5:31 pm

This poem is a little like an epigram, which is a short witty poem. Nice job.
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rhymarhyma
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PostSubject: Re: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptyFri Aug 12, 2011 5:34 pm

Right on! That picture of the dog is hilarious!
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PostSubject: Re: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptyFri Aug 12, 2011 5:37 pm

very beautiful, almost like your own incantation towards your faith.
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rhymarhyma
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PostSubject: Re: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptySat Aug 13, 2011 9:06 pm

Thank you, crystalleek. Why did you delete your poem? I loved it.
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PostSubject: Re: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptyMon Aug 15, 2011 9:21 am

Your welcome, and thank you :) I reposted I suppose I had cold feet.
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PostSubject: Re: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptyMon Aug 15, 2011 4:59 pm

Well done, I love the message that comes across in this piece even while being so short, it's sweet. :)
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PostSubject: Re: The puzzle that is me   The puzzle that is me EmptyMon Aug 15, 2011 6:07 pm

I have been referred to as "Sweet Mikey Brown" in certain parts of the world. Well, a few parts of the world. Okay, only my kids call me that. I don't know why, considering our last name isn't Brown. Kids are crazy sometimes. I'm glad you like the rhyme.
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