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PostSubject: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyTue May 21, 2013 10:00 am

Who Am I

If I stood right before you,
Would you know me?
Would a slap in the face,
Result in retribution?
Or an examining of why?
Would you allow me to change you,
Or would you run away?
Scared of what you might become?
Will you at least look at me?
Or shun me for what you can hold onto right now,
Hoping for a better eventuality,
Than what you know will happen?
Will a mirror reveal it?
They don't lit.
What you see is what you get.
But does it have to be that way?
What, who, how many could change?
Because of me.
Who Am I?
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyTue May 21, 2013 3:29 pm

had to read it a few times, i'm slow. good questions, thought provoking!
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyTue May 21, 2013 4:36 pm

But can you answer the question that envelops all the other questions? There is a point I am trying to get the readers to, and that is to answer the question of Who Am I of this piece? What is being pointed to here?
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyTue May 21, 2013 4:47 pm


Absolutely..."Who am I" ...is JESUS!
Then again it's fairly open to interpretation and subjective, depending on the lens viewed through and the way this was written.
Seems like more of a "let me ask you something" game...rather than a firm affirmation!
Questions within questions, circles within circles, in uncertain destinations, the right answer known only to the poser of the question.
Goading the reader on to attempt to extrapolate a full view from a single dimension.
It could just as easily be a reference to satan.
"who am I?" looking in a mirror's reflection, if we are made in God's image then why can't we see Him in us, so many questions?
Like I said: "thought provoking", is it a quiz, a test, art, craft?
Jesus asked: "but who do you say I am?"
Jesus answered the Pharisee's question with a question, for which they had no good answer...something to do with the baptism of John?
Sometimes, the answers come much, much, later to questions we have in the present...in learned patience.


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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyWed May 22, 2013 2:19 am

Hoping for a better eventuality,
Than what you know will happen?

Two very powerful lines, Sir. They appear to speak of the "stall" of the un-redeemed. They are answered by the "love not the world" message of John in his First Epistle. And sadly, in these people's inner core, they know of the sad consequences of unbelief and rebellion, but seem unable to change (like the addict).
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyWed May 22, 2013 9:36 am

Like the addict? Trippy, yo.
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyWed May 22, 2013 10:10 am

Hint, Hint. It's more a what than a who. I might have mislabeled it. Sorry. tks for all the comments, keep working it. Blessings
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptySun May 26, 2013 5:36 am

Alex, i'll take puzzling poems for $600.00.
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptySun May 26, 2013 5:46 am

I'll wager my two cents on "conscience". (But first a commercial...)
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptySun May 26, 2013 6:47 am

LOL!
Yes a "Word" from our Sponsor would seem appropriate and welcome...hmm?

And the answer is?...
"the manner, in which an idiot is held in suspense!"
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyTue May 28, 2013 6:09 am

TRUTH But yes, on could say Jesus, for He is Grace and Truth. My thoughts were just rolling around in that specific arena. (And now this word from your friend and mine.)
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyFri May 31, 2013 12:18 am

Well, here is the word from the sponsor...It's a beautiful, well written piece, otherwise, it wouldn't have set off such a spark, and even get you, eagles, to chuckle at Mr. Blair. So there. I love this piece vinedresser. Well done!
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PostSubject: Re: Who Am I   Who Am I EmptyFri May 31, 2013 2:34 am

A real surprise considering the fact that the author likes tootsie rolls!
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