Suffering Face Down

Awesome !

What a powerful song!

I love the physicality in this. I can feel and see what the protagonist feels and sees. Those physical descriptions really help the reader connect. Nice work! It will sound awesome to rock music. As you know, that's my favorite beat.

Just a couple of things:

In the following verse I found a typo. "You" should be capitalized:

I didn't see you coming

I absolutely love the use of some of God's other names in this line. Very creative and I feel the heart in it. Also the capitalization for "You" was missed:

So I'm standin' for you God, Almighty, Nissi, Aba

Some of my favorite verses in this piece were:

My sins exposed in the broad daylight
Naked, bleeding Holy blood
You let slip from Your veins for me
You cried to Father "It is done!"

Will this be the refrain? If not, I think it would really work out good to use it as such . Also, "Your" should be capitalized, and ellipses only come in threes:

CAUSE I'M STANDING ON THIS ROCK!

I'm crawling in your blood
I'm living for You savior
Just like I said I would......

I love your wife's work. I hope she starts posting some of her own work on here. We'd love to get to know her.

She is actually an amazing writer but she is overworked at the moment, all in His time.

Raw and Powerful!! a picture of painful surrender to the One who alone can deliver the bruised, battered, bleeding and repentant Soul...How Sweet is His Touch.

Wonderful thing .... God's accepting us no matter when, where or why! WhoooWeeeee!!!