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PostSubject: Thirteen days   Thirteen days EmptyFri Aug 12, 2011 5:48 pm

I put my head in my hands in disbelief.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of grief.

Two weeks to cherish was far too brief.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of grief.

Suddenly I realized all my worst fears.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of tears.

Life isn't always as it appears.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of tears.

And the tears kept coming like a runaway train.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of pain.

It seemed like nothing could ever stop the rain.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of pain.

But then the sun came out and cleared the skies.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of why's.

It eased my heart and softened my cries.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of why's.

It was time with my son that I got to enjoy.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of joy.

To look at, to hold, and to love my baby boy.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of joy.

So innocent and fragile, like a precious little dove.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of love.

Now he's playing with the angels, flying high above.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of love.

I'll never forget his beautiful face.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of grace.

I know I'll see him someday in a far away place.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days of grace.

Two weeks of the truest love a person can go through.

Thirteen days. Thirteen days so true.

And I know he can hear me when I whisper "I miss you."

Thirteen days. Thirteen days so true.
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PostSubject: Re: Thirteen days   Thirteen days EmptyFri Aug 12, 2011 5:53 pm

I see another quatrain in there somewhere.
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PostSubject: Re: Thirteen days   Thirteen days EmptyFri Aug 12, 2011 6:18 pm

The quatrain, apparently, is my go-to style.
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PostSubject: Re: Thirteen days   Thirteen days EmptySat Aug 13, 2011 10:10 am

Absolutely beautiful! I loved it!
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PostSubject: Re: Thirteen days   Thirteen days EmptySat Aug 13, 2011 12:16 pm

Thank you. That was the hardest rhyme, emotionally, I've ever written.
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PostSubject: Re: Thirteen days   Thirteen days EmptySat Feb 18, 2012 8:12 am

someone needs to read this again, or for the first time. shouldn't be buried 17 pages away.
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PostSubject: Re: Thirteen days   Thirteen days EmptySat Feb 18, 2012 9:19 am

This is heartwrenching...but absolutely beautiful! Definitely brought tears to my eyes.
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