This Time

This Time

We've met
You take at the special find you get
You don't see shame, don't see regret
You see SONrise instead of SONset
We've met

You're mine
Let me share these thought's with you one time
You're offering glory bound sunshine
I'm reading all the little print that's fine
You're mine

Now living my life just for your way
You're picking me up on the rainiest day's
I lose myself but myself you find
I now live for only you this time
This time...I live for you this time

My one
Just when all my wrong's could not be undone
You washed away my sin's and you saw none
You're calling out my name and here I come
My one

I see
I see the plan that you now have for me
I see peace I see tranquility
You've untied my soul and now I'm free
I see

Now living my life just for your way
You're loving arm's I'm going to stay
I lose myself but myself you find
I now live for only you this time
This time...I live for you this time

Hello petey2381,

Welcome to Christian Creative Writers. I am so glad to have you join us and share your work with us. Many blessings to you.

I love the joy you express in this poem. This sounds very musical to me.

Now, here's my little critique:

In the first stanza, the line "You take at the special find you get," is a little unclear. Is the Lord taking or the subject of the poem taking?
Also, one of my favorite lines is, "You see SONrise instead of SONset." Awesome work!

In the second stanza, the line "Let me share these thought's with you one time" creates a little cognitive dissonance for me, because you wouldn't want to share it only one time. Perhaps you could share it for "all time"? Also, I thought the line "I'm reading all the little print that's fine" was very clever. Love it!

In several places you used the possessive form of a word (i.e. thought's, day's, wrong's, sin's, arm's) where they shouldn't be. They do not need apostrophes.
And, don't forget to capitalize 'You' when it refers to the Lord.

Great work! Thanks for sharing it with us.

Thanks for sharing this good poem! I know many will be able to relate to this piece of your heart as I did.