rhymarhyma WRITERS’ MENTOR (500 + posts)
Posts : 549 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Denver, CO
| Subject: Be gone, blackbird Thu Aug 11, 2011 4:55 pm | |
| Oh blackbird, blackbird of death I've heard your call and I've felt your breath You stalked me for so very long squawking out the Reaper's song With talons wrapped around your prize pecking at my weary eyes pushing me out on that ledge closer, closer to the edge but just before I took that leap before I took my final sleep I cried out loud, and my cry was heard Salvation came...be gone, blackbird |
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Lora SITE ADMINISTRATOR
Posts : 5907 Age : 53 Join date : 2011-07-26 Location : Southern CA
| Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Thu Aug 11, 2011 5:29 pm | |
| This is nearly a sonnet. English sonnets are lyric poems that are 14 lines long falling into three quatrains (poems that are four rhyming lines) and a concluding couplet (two rhyming lines). Italian (or Petrarchan) sonnets are divided into two quatrains and a six-line sestet.
Yet again, great poem!
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rhymarhyma WRITERS’ MENTOR (500 + posts)
Posts : 549 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Denver, CO
| Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Thu Aug 11, 2011 9:38 pm | |
| You are absolutely educating me! Tomorrow I'm gonna try and actually follow a style. Right now, I just kinda write what I feel. Right on! |
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cindergirl6 PENCIL PUSHER (26-50 posts)
Posts : 47 Age : 40 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Central Florida
| Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Fri Aug 12, 2011 1:42 pm | |
| I can definitely see the sonnet in this. The last line is perfect. "Be gone blackbird!" I love poetry for it's metaphors. You can see this in some of my writing and well. Keep it coming! |
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rhymarhyma WRITERS’ MENTOR (500 + posts)
Posts : 549 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Denver, CO
| Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Sat Aug 13, 2011 8:49 pm | |
| Where are your writings, cindergirl6? I wanna read. |
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cindergirl6 PENCIL PUSHER (26-50 posts)
Posts : 47 Age : 40 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Central Florida
| Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Mon Aug 15, 2011 6:07 am | |
| http://contributor.yahoo.com/user/1164427/aimee_weed.html
https://en.wordpress.com/signup/
http://www.authonomy.com/writing-community/profile/me/ |
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rhymarhyma WRITERS’ MENTOR (500 + posts)
Posts : 549 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Denver, CO
| Subject: Re: Be gone, blackbird Mon Aug 15, 2011 7:42 pm | |
| The only one I could access was the yahoo. I like your style, cindergirl6. Word. |
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