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JimmyA
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JimmyA

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Location : Orchard Park NY-near Buffalo

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PostSubject: Room Above     Room Above EmptySun Aug 14, 2011 2:04 pm

ROOM ABOVE

My big old house sits high upon a hill.
I wanted to go up even higher still.
A window unto Heaven is what I seek.
So I built myself a widow's peak.

In days of old she would sit and quilt.
In a parapet way up highly built.
With windows facing to the sea.
She waits for him, "To come home to me."

Nowadays I sit and wait,
for Heaven to decide my fate.
I sit up there for hours alone.
No friends, no family, no telephone.

In solitide I sit and pray.
That maybe there will come a day,
when Heaven will see me sitting there.
And at the Lord's table they'll place my chair.

Above my house I built a room.
And I feel that it's safe to presume.
Through my devotion and through my love,
they'll make me room, up above.
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Location : Southern CA

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PostSubject: Re: Room Above     Room Above EmptySun Aug 14, 2011 2:23 pm

Hello JimmyA,
Welcome to Christian Creative Writers. I am glad you joined us.

You painted a very vivid picture for me of how my grandmother must have looked when she was praying her family into God's Kingdom, including me. You even managed to make the whole outline of the poem appealing to the eye. This poem touched my heart. Nice work!
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rhymarhyma
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rhymarhyma

Posts : 549
Join date : 2011-08-11
Location : Denver, CO

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PostSubject: Re: Room Above     Room Above EmptyMon Aug 15, 2011 6:09 pm

Awesome! Not only do I love the poem, it looks visually fantastic. I gotta work on that.
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JimmyA
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JimmyA

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Location : Orchard Park NY-near Buffalo

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PostSubject: Re: Room Above     Room Above EmptyTue Aug 16, 2011 4:39 pm

Use the format tools on this website. They are simple to use with a preview button that allows you to go back and forth easily. Your work would benefit greatly from proper formatting. When a piece is easy to read through proper formatting it makes it a more enjoyable reading experience. Take the time to apply it to your work and your readers will benefit.
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