My Jesus

[size=12]My Jesus

My Jesus gives hope,
When you feel hopeless.
My Jesus gives strength,
When you feel weakness.

My Jesus lets you weep,
Then wipes your tears with comfort.
My Jesus renews spirit,
To love and laugh again.

My Jesus shows humility,
With grace you hear his call,
You have My Jesus with you
To catch you when you fall.

My Jesus gives friendship,
To take your journey forth
To touch the lives of hungry souls
And meet them in their falls.

You can never lose My Jesus
He is always in your heart,
Just close your eyes and listen,
My friend, he will never part.

I love the message in this one, it's beautiful. I can feel your heart in it. The rhyming doesn't seem too forced and that is always a good thing. I especially love the following lines:


To start with, I would suggest breaking the poem up a little to make it easier on the eye when reading. For an example, I broke the poem up in quatrains below to show you what I mean. (A
Quatrain is a stanza or poem of four lines, the four
lines can be written in any rhyme scheme.) Also, if you would like to learn more about poetry, you can find it at this LINK. It might be fun to play around a little.

I liked it, a lot. My Jesus, makes it so personal, as it should be, a personal relationship that you share with the world. How dialectical.

Thank you for your comments I will take those suggestions on board, much appreciated !

Nat

I really liked your poem, esp. the first line:

"My Jesus gives hope"

How would we go on without our hope in Jesus?
Thank you,
Brenda Fox

Love the message from My Jesus! :light a candle