rhymarhyma WRITERS’ MENTOR (500 + posts)
Posts : 549 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Denver, CO
| Subject: Ugly, beautiful Thu Jan 31, 2013 10:17 am | |
| Pain, pain, go away...come again some other day
Wish I might, wish I may...make the ugly go away
Ugly is the world, and it's the world I learn from
Ugly is inside of me, for ugly I've become
My heart has turned to darkness, my mind is in decay
The flowers, skies and rainbows are all different shades of gray
Tainted and polluted are the thoughts behind these eyes
Justifying twisted truths, these lips speak only lies
Innocence seems so far away...so far away from me
yet deep inside this pain I hide, salvation holds the key
The beauty of what once was is the beauty that will fly free
Ugly I see...ugly I be...ugly, beautiful poetry |
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oneagleswings ADMIN II
CCW GOLD MEMBER CCW SUPPORTER 2X POETRY CONTEST WINNER Posts : 4323 Age : 64 Join date : 2011-08-30 Location : south carolina
| Subject: Re: Ugly, beautiful Fri Feb 01, 2013 2:12 pm | |
| Love the sheer honesty of your work...always in all ways! |
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rhymarhyma WRITERS’ MENTOR (500 + posts)
Posts : 549 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Denver, CO
| Subject: Re: Ugly, beautiful Fri Feb 01, 2013 11:41 pm | |
| Well, no use in masking what's really goin' on, and that's what was goin' on at the time. That time is over, though. Word. |
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Jak Hardy WRITER (51-100 posts)
POETRY CONTEST WINNER Posts : 82 Age : 27 Join date : 2011-11-07 Location : Sunshine Coast, Australia
| Subject: Re: Ugly, beautiful Sun Feb 03, 2013 4:22 am | |
| - oneagleswings wrote:
- Love the sheer honesty of your work...always in all ways!
Completely agree! And I really, really enjoyed how naturally it flowed. Especially like the powerful ending "Ugly I see...ugly I be...ugly, beautiful poetry" |
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Lora SITE ADMINISTRATOR
Posts : 5907 Age : 53 Join date : 2011-07-26 Location : Southern CA
| Subject: Re: Ugly, beautiful Thu Feb 14, 2013 12:46 am | |
| I love the whole thing, but I have to agree with Jak, that ending line really clenches it:
Ugly I see...ugly I be...ugly, beautiful poetry |
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