Fractured

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Fractured
By Scott Newport

The act of dying
Is not such a hard
Thing

Living is work
Pounding on nails
Rust squeegeed off
As steel points pierce
The grains of
Relationships

Hammering out
Thoughts
While holding on
To greased wooden
Handles

Just look at
Those who slip
Away-
Mud slide
Off the cliff

No way to stop
Its journey
Flowing with
Gravity

Subject: Re: Fractured Mon Mar 19, 2012 9:27 pm

I sense some of your pain

Living is work
Pounding on nails

Hammering out
Thoughts

While trying keep a grip on life
an emotional piece thanks for sharing

Subject: Re: Fractured Mon Mar 19, 2012 10:22 pm

I can really relate to the first stanza. After living through a long life of trials and adversity, it can feel tiring. Thankfully we can lean on the Lord's strength rather than ours until we meet Him in heaven.

Loved all of the references to nails, hammering, steal points, wood, and earth. They made me visualize a coffin being built and put into the ground. The use of imagery and sound is very well done in this one. Sadness exudes from this. Awesome work.