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Join date : 2012-03-30
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Just Be Empty
PostSubject: Just Be   Just Be EmptySat Mar 31, 2012 5:10 am

JUST BE

A Truth
A light
A lamp
A path
A way through this life.

The spoken
The unspoken
The silence
The way
The very stillness that creates.

Be good
Be bad
Be humble
Be wise
Be anything
Just be.
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PostSubject: Re: Just Be   Just Be EmptySat Mar 31, 2012 11:40 am

The first two stanzas had me going along nicely. They seem to be taking me somewhere positive, but when getting to the last stanza, I was left hanging, feeling a little depressed after having reached a dead end. BUT, then I reread it with creativity in mind, as you state in the line, "The very stillness that creates," and it seemed to come to life for me. Initially, I looked at what appeared to be a simple poem, as just that, a simple poem, but each time I read it, I get a little something new from it. Great work!
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