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rhymarhyma
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PostSubject: I'll remember you   I'll remember you EmptySat Nov 05, 2011 10:35 pm

"For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son..."

to keep me from becoming the forgotten one



Do you remember me, Lord, on the day I was born

Was I wearing half a halo and a maniacal horn

I know I was pure when I came out of the womb

but it seems like death embraced me as I entered this tomb

This tomb that is the world, this tomb that we call Earth

Was I only born to die since the moment of my birth



Do you remember me, Lord, every day that I live

Is there anything I've done that you wouldn't forgive

I thought that I strayed off the path that you paved

but I now realize that was my road to be saved

I didn't go the wrong way, I just went the long way

and every dark step brought me to a brighter day



Will you remember me, Lord, on the day I pass on

Will it be dark as night, or an eternal dawn

Will my own memories forever make me cry

or will I remember tomorrow before it even passes by

Eternal dreaming, eternal screaming, my hope and faith is true

and the one thing I'll remember, Lord...I'll remember you
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PostSubject: Re: I'll remember you   I'll remember you EmptySat Nov 05, 2011 10:48 pm

Love the dialog with the Lord and all the questioning and yearning. It makes this a powerful piece.
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PostSubject: Re: I'll remember you   I'll remember you EmptySat Nov 05, 2011 11:08 pm

You've got my attention.
"and the one thing I'll remember, Lord...I'll remember you"
remembering a bit more myself.

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