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CCW GOLD MEMBER CCW SUPPORTER Posts : 15 Age : 45 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Louisville
Subject: Anymore Sun Aug 28, 2011 3:45 pm
I couldn’t see beneath the smile Nor could I penetrate your gaze You pushed and made your way through Somehow beating down all my doors
Digging deeper until you found your way Fitting yourself far below my skin Replacing the truth with illusions I was paper thin allowing you to shape me
I used to cling to those memories of us And dream the future I would build my life around you and me But I’m not that girl anymore.
You poured my nightmares down my throat You tore into my heart and killed the light All while leaving me lost in the dark Of loneliness and betrayal
Your smooth promises, your easy lies Rolling off your tongue like blazing ice A constant struggle between heaven and hell Became my one and favorite vice
Long nights clutching my pillow while my tears Caused my head to hurt and my throat sore. I used to dream you would come back for me But I’m not that girl anymore.
My steady source of addiction was Fear of losing you mingled with escape You craved for me to misplace myself Leaving behind all sense of a real identity
While you twisted me and shed my layers Moving me to the beat of your stride I became comfortable in your shadow I let you cut me, you let me bleed
I used to let you suffocate me Breathing your poison into my core I used to die daily But I’m not that girl anymore.
christianonfire7 PENCIL PUSHER (26-50 posts)
Posts : 49 Join date : 2011-08-13
Subject: Re: Anymore Mon Aug 29, 2011 1:02 pm
Wow... The emotion in this piece is raw and 'real', it's amazing, I know many girls (even I in many ways) can relate to this piece, the last part most of all. ' I'm not that girl anymore.' it truly speaks volumes to the heart. Great job!
aprilrain APPRENTICE (6-25 posts)
CCW GOLD MEMBER CCW SUPPORTER Posts : 15 Age : 45 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Louisville
Subject: Re: Anymore Mon Aug 29, 2011 4:28 pm
Many thanks for taking the time to read this and respond.
oneagleswings ADMIN II
CCW GOLD MEMBER CCW SUPPORTER 2X POETRY CONTEST WINNER Posts : 4323 Age : 64 Join date : 2011-08-30 Location : south carolina
Subject: Re: Anymore Thu Sep 01, 2011 5:47 am
Very powerful piece, I know it must have been painful yet liberating to write (cathartic). thank you for sharing. particularly liked last four lines, thought provoking ending.
peace to you.
rhymarhyma WRITERS’ MENTOR (500 + posts)
Posts : 549 Join date : 2011-08-11 Location : Denver, CO
Subject: Re: Anymore Thu Sep 01, 2011 1:51 pm
Love it when someone puts all of themselves out there for the world to see. No doubt. Excellent.
oneagleswings ADMIN II
CCW GOLD MEMBER CCW SUPPORTER 2X POETRY CONTEST WINNER Posts : 4323 Age : 64 Join date : 2011-08-30 Location : south carolina
Subject: Re: Anymore Mon Dec 26, 2011 12:12 am
:)
Lora SITE ADMINISTRATOR
Posts : 5907 Age : 53 Join date : 2011-07-26 Location : Southern CA
Subject: Re: Anymore Mon Dec 26, 2011 10:35 pm
What a moving piece. Well written and full of passion. Love it!